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Well, Sharigan360... I'm not going to get too wrapped up in saying all the things I've already said at the end of every previous chapter.  But, I did save one observation for the end...

The way you jump in and out of the fighters' heads (and the seconds', too, for that matter)...  The way you manage to squeeze their emotions in there right in the middle of the action... That's not a simple thing to do.  Fight scenes have to have a certain pace and flow to them, in order to make the reader feel the intensity.  It's much too easy for those internal sidebars to get in the way and chop up the action.  But you fit them in with a very deft touch.  The way you sneak them in there doesn't interrupt anything, at all.  Each is just a quick moment before the next gloved fist finds its target.  I'm very impressed with the way you're able to do that. :)